Topic: The graph shows the percentage of the Australian workforce in in five industries between 1962 and 2012.
The supplied line graph illustrates the proportion of
Australian
population who Correct article usage
the Australian
works
for 5 industries Wrong verb form
worked
during
1962 till 2012.
Change preposition
from
Overall
, the line graph includes workforce
in services, construction and mining with Correct article usage
the workforce
uptrend
Correct article usage
an uptrend
while
three other sections such
as manufacturing and agriculture with downtrend.
The noticeable change occurred in services and it started from 52% in 1962 and reached to
78% in 2012. Change preposition
apply
Moreover
, the mining workforce was 2% in the first year, and it slightly increased to approximately 5% in the last
year. Likewise
, construction experienced the same pattern with 9% to 11% in 1962 and 2012 respectively.
Additionally
, manufacturing workers were 25% and it remained flat until 1972, but went continuously down during the years and reached to
10% in 2012. Change preposition
apply
Furthermore
, people who work in agriculture were 11% of Australian
workforce at first and the Correct article usage
the Australian
numbers
of them Fix the agreement mistake
number
was fluctuated
, and Change to the active voice
fluctuated
has fluctuated
finally
it became to near 6% in 2012.Add a comma
finally,
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