News media is more influential nowadays. Some people think it is a negative development. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays,
news
channels
are influencing more than before,
while
some individuals argue that, they
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negative
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impact on
people
. In my opinion, I agree that
news
platforms are becoming more toxic rather than informative.
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few years,
news
channles
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channels
not only
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news
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news
to the public
,
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but
also
entertain
people
in order to perform some funny
activties
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activities
or
commentery
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commentary
commenter
. Since many
channles
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channels
came into
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media industry,
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becomes
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bias
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and difficult to trust. these new media
channels
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more on TRP and
views
rather than sharing
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information
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the public.
furthermore
, common
people
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on the live
news
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,
these
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channels
take the opportunity to influence them by manipulating
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real
information
, so they can attract more
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their
news
channel.
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Furthermore
, new
news
channels
induce new reporter to obtain any controversial
news
in any situation so they can telecast that on their channel.
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, many political disputes are appearing because
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some
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release their
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television
.
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is
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because
they have to maintain their public
views
for personal revenue. As a
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, common
people
could not get the real reasons behind that
news
.
On the contrary
, before these
uncertainity
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uncertainty
of the
news
information
conflicts,
news
channels
were sharing
a valuable
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information
without doing any
views
competition.
For instance
, before covid-19 event,
news
channels
were provides
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the
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precise
information
to the public, but later in time,
news
channel
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channels
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undertand
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understood
the real trick behind
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more
views
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high TRP. which is creating
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a negative effect
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on
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people
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decisions.
thus
, many
people
now do not care
as
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such
on
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the television
news
infomations
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information
. In conclusion,
news
channels
not only
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influence
the
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public perception
,
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but
also
create a negative distraction on their
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decisions
decision
aslo
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also
.
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