The chart below shows the number of jobs in tourism related industries in one UK city between 1989 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of jobs in tourism related industries in

one UK city between 1989 and 2009.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features,

and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart gives information on the employment in tourism industries regarding
Resturants
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restaurants
,
Hotels
,
Sport
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Sports
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and leisure, and Travel and tours, every five
years
over the period from 1989 to 2009 in a city
of
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in
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UK
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the UK
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. In general, over the
20
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last 20
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years
,
Resturants
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restaurants
and
Hotels
provided more jobs
then
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than
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the other
industies
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industries
did.
In addition
, there is no certain trend or similar pattern of the numbers in the four industries, the figures went up and fell in different
years
. Looking into the details of the changes in each sector. People
worked
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who worked
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in Restaurants outnumbered
that
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those
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of
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in
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other sectors over the period except in 1994. The number increased each year and reached a peak at 1600 in 2004 before it fell to 1100 in 2009.
Numbers
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Number
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of employees
of
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in
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Hotels
are
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is
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quite close
in
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apply
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each year. It went up from 1100 in 1989 to 1400 after 5
years
and
then
decreased steadily by approximately 100 every five
years
. The figure
of
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for
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Travel and tours had
the
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an
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identical trend, but it was 300 less
in
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apply
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each year than that
of
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for
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Hotels
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hotels, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.

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  • fluctuate
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • significant increase
  • moderate rise
  • sharp fall
  • peak
  • trough
  • stagnant
  • sector
  • tourism-related industries
  • employment figures
  • data
  • time period
  • comparison
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