Task 1 - the graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph presents the
number
of shops
which have closed relative to the quantity of shops
which have opened, between the years 2011 and 2018.
Overall
, the number
of closures has for the majority of the period exceeded the amount of openings in 5 different years. Meanwhile, the amount of shops
opening has only seen a higher figure in only 2 different years (2011 and 2015).
To begin
with, while
initially
there was a higher volume of opened shops
in 2011, the number
of shops
which have closed has seen a substantial rise from 2011 to 2013, meaning that its quantity has increased from around 6300 to 7000. On the contrary
, during this
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two-year
period
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period,
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experienced a significant decline from around 8500 to 4000 in 2012. Despite Unnecessary verb
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this
downward trend however
, the Add the comma(s)
, however
number
of openings did level off in 2012, although
this
quantity witnessed a slower growth than that of closers from 2012 to 2014. Similar
pattern was present from 2016 to 2018, where the volume of dismantling was higher than that of the creations.
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on the other hand
, these trends have seen a reversal. From 2014 to 2015 the rate of new selling institutions exceeded that of the ones shutting down since in 2015, the figures were 4000 and 1000 respectively, albeit this
only lasted for one year. Furthermore
, in 2011 this
was a similar case but in comparison with 2015, the difference between the 2 divisions was smaller of around 2000.Submitted by nejla.abdullayeva on
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