Task 1 - the graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Task 1 - the graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph presents the
number
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of
shops
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which have closed relative to the quantity of
shops
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which have opened, between the years 2011 and 2018.
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, the
number
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of closures has for the majority of the period exceeded the amount of openings in 5 different years. Meanwhile, the amount of
shops
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opening has only seen a higher figure in only 2 different years (2011 and 2015).
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with,
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initially
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there was a higher volume of opened
shops
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in 2011, the
number
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of
shops
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which have closed has seen a substantial rise from 2011 to 2013, meaning that its quantity has increased from around 6300 to 7000.
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, during
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period
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the shop openings
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experienced a significant decline from around 8500 to 4000 in 2012. Despite
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downward trend
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however
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, the
number
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of openings did level off in 2012,
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quantity witnessed a slower growth than that of closers from 2012 to 2014.
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pattern was present from 2016 to 2018, where the volume of dismantling was higher than that of the creations. In 2011 and 2015
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, these trends have seen a reversal. From 2014 to 2015 the rate of new selling institutions exceeded that of the ones shutting down since in 2015, the figures were 4000 and 1000 respectively, albeit
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only lasted for one year.
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, in 2011
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was a similar case but in comparison with 2015, the difference between the 2 divisions was smaller of around 2000.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, shops with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "presents" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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