The maps below show the changes of a school from 1985 to present time.
The illustration of an unidentified school
represent
Change the verb form
represents
few
changes from 1985 to Correct article usage
a few
present
.
Correct article usage
the present
Overall
, it can be clearly observed that there were some minor and major changes of
the buildings, Change preposition
to
whereas
the area
of the entrance and exit, office, car park, and playing fiels
remained the same until Correct your spelling
fields
field
todays
. Correct your spelling
today
Moreover
, it is interesting to note that the greater the population size, the larger the expansion of the facilities provided from
the school.
Change preposition
by
To begin
with, in 1985 with
a school population of 1,500 students contained only essential and small-size buildings. A y-shaped Change preposition
apply
like
path Correct word choice
apply
was surrounding
the rectangular car park Wrong verb form
surrounded
area
. The leg of it lead
to Wrong verb form
led
a playing fields
was the largest Correct the article-noun agreement
a playing field
playing fields
area
and at the end
of plan
. there Add an article
the plan
were
Correct subject-verb agreement
was
small
car park and Correct article usage
a small
classrooms
building to the left of the pathway Fix the agreement mistake
classroom
as well as
another 2 storeys
building for classrooms. On the left side, there are Fix the agreement mistake
storey
office
and Fix the agreement mistake
offices
library
situated at the corner.
Correct article usage
a library
Hence
, in today's plan, with a size of 2,300 students, the library now turned into a learning resource centre which include
Change the verb form
includes
computer
room inside. Correct article usage
a computer
one
more class were Capitalize word
One
adding
and the Wrong verb form
added
two storeys
building was built one more storey on top of it. Correct your spelling
two-storey
Furthermore
, pool
and fitness centre were added, Correct article usage
a pool
whereas
the playing fields
Fix the agreement mistake
field
area
was reduced.Submitted by kamonluck1999 on
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