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online education is becoming more and more popular .Some people claim the e-learning has so many benifits that it will replace face to face education soon.Others say that tradational education is irreplaceable.Dicuss both views and give your opinion.

#education #people #benifits #face #dicuss
Online education has become a huge
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business
 in
todays
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 world.It became more popular after the huge pandemic.Some people claim that e-learning has so many
benifits
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benefits
 that it will soon
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 the face-to-face learning.
Whereas
 some other people think that the
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traditional
 learning od irreplaceable.
Firstly
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 platforms have been
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really useful
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as well as
 learn from
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distance
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 the
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 the teacher
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didn't
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 to travel
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 to teach or learn.E-learning is very
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convenient
and comfortable.
For example
,during the
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 lockdown e-learning helped a lot of
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people gain
 knowledge as all working sectors
such
 as schools,
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colleges
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 and offices had
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online
 sessions running.
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,
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face-to face
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face-to-face
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 education is more important than
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online classes cause,the
students
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 direct learning,they
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askedquestions
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asked questions
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 disciplined and had activities on a regular basis.During online sessions
students
 started to cheat on exams with their parents
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just
 to score good marks
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and
 not to gain knowledge.
For instance
,when
students
 were attending exams based on
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regular
 classes they scored
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 percentage of marks
whereas
 when
students
 attended exams after online classes scored
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 very low percentage. Whether it is
e-learning
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 class or
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is face-to-face class
students
 should be determined to study well and score good marks because
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 their duty to study.And
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personaly
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personally
 think that face-to-face sessions are the best.
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Specific Examples
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Understanding
You effectively discussed both views of the topic, demonstrating a good understanding of the task.
Argumentation
You made clear arguments for both sides, showing an ability to consider multiple perspectives.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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