Some people think that the increase in the number of obese people should be the responsibility of the government, while others think it should be the responsibility of individuals. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

In our generation, the growing number of obese

people

has become a crucial problem. There is a debate if

governments

should take

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responsibility

regarding

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the rising number of

obesity

or if

this

is a problem for individuals to solve. In my opinion,

governments

have a huge responsibility to prevent

obesity

. In

this

essay, I will discuss both views and declare my opinion.

Firstly

, I think the real

reason

behind

obesity

is processed

foods

.

For

this

reason

, the more human beings consume these GM

foods

, the more they gain weight.

For instance

,

people

who eat organic fruits and vegetables daily, have

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risk

to become

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of becoming

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an

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obese.

Moreover

, consuming processed

foods

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blood sugar fluctuation and

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people

unable to move enough. Eventually,

people

who eat lots of non-organic and unhealthy products will take more calories and feel lazy day by day. In the

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this

will cause

obesity

. Regarding

this

information,

governments

are definitely responsible

to prevent

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obesity

among

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because the first and biggest

reason

of

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obesity

is the GM products

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produced by

governments

. Authorities need to move faster

for trading

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more natural

foods

for

people

and encourage them not to buy toxic ones.

On the other hand

, some

people

may think that every person is responsible

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their actions,

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individuals may have not any chance to choose what to eat.

Although

, as a human, we have our own conscious to decide whether we should consume or not,

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society does not provide enough choices for us.

Additionally

, the system pushes

people

to buy GM

foods

because these are more affordable and

also

easy to find in regular markets.

For

this

reason

, a lot of

people

tend to spend money on chemical food products rather than organic ones.

Finally

,

people

have

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not enough right to choose the better option. In conclusion,

governments

are the first responsible to take care of

obesity

. After authorities produce healthier

foods

,

people

will have a chance to achieve those and

obesity

will be reduced.