The chart below shows the number of jobs in tourism related industries in one UK city between 1989 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of jobs in tourism related industries in

one UK city between 1989 and 2009.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features,

and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram below illustrates the number of jobs in many industries related to tourism in a city in the UK from 1989 to 2009.
Firstly
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, when it comes to the types of jobs, 4 types were mentioned which were travel and tours, sport and leisure, hotels and restaurants, as commonly seen, the food seemed to be lack of people most
according to
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the chart, it went up to 1600 jobs available in 2004 considered as its peak, followed by hotels, sport and tours
subsequently
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,
nevertheless
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, in 1994, the unemployment rates of hotels' company was more.
Secondly
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,
although
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travel was often the lowest, over 1000 seats were empty for new employees in 1994,
besides
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that, the crowds deviated their interests into leisure time,
nonetheless
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, in other years, the sum varied.
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, as we can see, despite the changes in 1994, the orders, during 1989, 1999, 2004 and 2009, of those employment were the same, the highest one was restaurant business
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the lowest one was for travel-and-tours.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuate
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • significant increase
  • moderate rise
  • sharp fall
  • peak
  • trough
  • stagnant
  • sector
  • tourism-related industries
  • employment figures
  • data
  • time period
  • comparison
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