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The table and pie chart give information about the population in Australia according to different nationalities and areas. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and pie chart give information about the population in Australia according to different nationalities and areas. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given pie charts illustrate the percentage of residential nationalities and the table chart
provides
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 how the citizens populate in the city and countryside
areas
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 in
Australia
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.
Overall
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, the number of native Australians still takes a lead in
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population
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,
while
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Dutch
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the Dutch
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accounts
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account
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 for a small proportion in the country.
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, it is evident that most people living in
Australia
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 tend to reside in the urban
areas
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 and just a small percentage of them opt for living in the rural
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. The pie chart shows that the vast majority of the
population
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 in
Australia
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 is Australian which is up to 73
percent
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 of the
population
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.
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, the figures for British,New Zealander and Chinese citizens are respectively at 7
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percent
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per cent
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, 3
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percent
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per cent
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 and 2
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percent
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.The rate of Dutch residents takes the lowest place with merely 1
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percent
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. Meanwhile, the other nationalities figure accounts for 14
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. From the table chart, it can be clearly seen that the number of
Australia
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's
population
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 choose to reside in the urban
areas
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 respectively with 80
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percent
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per cent
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 Australian, 89
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percent
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per cent
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 British , 90
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percent
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per cent
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 New Zealander and 83
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percent
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 Dutch people. Meanwhile, almost all
the
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Chinese nationality citizens
populate
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live
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 in the cities
with
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99
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percent
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per cent
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, and just a mere 1
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percent
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 of them choose to live in the countryside.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words areas, australia, population, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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