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The table and pie chart give information about the population in Australia according to different nationalities and areas. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and pie chart give information about the population in Australia according to different nationalities and areas. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given pie charts illustrate the percentage of residential nationalities and the table chart
provides
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 how the citizens populate in the city and countryside
areas
 in
Australia
.
Overall
, the number of native Australians still takes a lead in
total
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population
,
while
Dutch
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the Dutch
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accounts
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account
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 for a small proportion in the country.
Moreover
, it is evident that most people living in
Australia
 tend to reside in the urban
areas
 and just a small percentage of them opt for living in the rural
areas
. The pie chart shows that the vast majority of the
population
 in
Australia
 is Australian which is up to 73
percent
 of the
population
.
Whereas
, the figures for British,New Zealander and Chinese citizens are respectively at 7
percent
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, 3
percent
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per cent
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 and 2
percent
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per cent
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.The rate of Dutch residents takes the lowest place with merely 1
percent
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per cent
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. Meanwhile, the other nationalities figure accounts for 14
percent
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per cent
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. From the table chart, it can be clearly seen that the number of
Australia
's
population
 choose to reside in the urban
areas
 respectively with 80
percent
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per cent
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 Australian, 89
percent
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per cent
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 British , 90
percent
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per cent
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 New Zealander and 83
percent
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per cent
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 Dutch people. Meanwhile, almost all
the
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apply
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Chinese nationality citizens
populate
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live
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 in the cities
with
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99
percent
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per cent
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, and just a mere 1
percent
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per cent
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 of them choose to live in the countryside.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words areas, australia, population, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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