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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school.

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Nowadays, globalization progress is happening very strongly and gradually become an inevitable trend for world development.
Therefore
, anybody who knows more than one
language
, especially English processes a competitive advantage in all fields from communication, to study to work.
That is
 why some researchers suppose that it would be better for students to learn an overseas tongue from primary
school
instead
 of just starting at middle
school
. Starting to learn a foreign
language
 earlier can cause
children
 to encounter some difficulties,
such
 as sometimes
children
 will be confused between their native
language
 and foreign
language
 because
this
 is
also
 the process when
children
 are starting to learn about their mother
language
.
However
, beginning to learn an overseas
language
 at primary
school
 rather than secondary
school
 has advantages that outweigh the disadvantages.
Firstly
, it helps
children
 absorb foreign languages more naturally. When
children
 are kids, they will naturally acquire foreign languages in the sequence of listening – speaking – reading – and writing
instead
 of passively learning like when they are adults. Just like they learning their mother tongue, they are exposed to that
language
 the easier a new
language
 similar to the mother tongue.
Secondly
, it helps
children
 be more intelligent
,
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 and more developed in all other areas. Because they will translate one
language
 into another which increases the flexibility of the nervous system.
Thirdly
, it helps students listen – speaking correctly right from the beginning thanks to the ability to miraculously imitate words and intonation. In conclusion, looking at the great benefits above, we can conclude that learning a foreign
language
 should start as early as possible.
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