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The table below shows statistics about the top five countries for international tourism in 2012 and 2013.

The table below shows statistics about the top five countries for international tourism in 2012 and 2013.
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Given table, illustrates the range among five countries for annual tourism level.
Overall
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, in the table, all countries increased their number of visitors in 2013, except China.
France
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 was at the top of the list in 2012 with 83.0
million
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 and again took the peak point in 2013 with 84.7
million
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.
However
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, in both years
France
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 is one of the lowest visitor spending countries.
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, China's tourist spending range is lower than
France
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's for both years.
Besides
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, the number of tourists in 2012 for China was 57.7
million
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 and increased to 2.0 in 2013. Spain is in the middle of the schedule but the most amount of travellers increased in
this
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 country. In 2012 amount of sightseers
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 57.5
million
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, in 2013 it increased by 3.2
million
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. On the list, we can see that the USA on the top of the list for the most tourist spending,
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, the number of travellers is lower than in
France
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.
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, Italy is the least tourist spender country for both years.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words france, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tourist arrivals
  • influx of tourists
  • economic impact
  • job creation
  • infrastructure development
  • revenue generation
  • geographical distribution
  • popular destination
  • regional analysis
  • natural attractions
  • cultural heritage
  • seasonal trends
  • tourism patterns
  • climatic conditions
  • tourism preferences
  • adventure tourism
  • eco-tourism
  • cultural tourism
  • holiday seasons
  • local events
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