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some people believe that face to face communication is always more powerful than written communication.To what extend do you agree or diagree?

#people #face #communication #diagree
several people believe that
face to
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face
communication
 is always more powerful than written
communication
,
Iam
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I
 choose
agree
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 about
this
 topic.
Nowayads
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Nowadays
, I have experience when I was to make relationship
friend
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friends
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 and the government can do rule strategy in the future about how to improve skills.
Beside
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,
this
is
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give positive benefit for some people that good
communication
,
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and increase
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increase
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 skill speaking with work
partner
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. Should that be good value and
then
 a person
prefer
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option
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face
 to
face
 compared to written
communication
.
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However
, some
problem
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problems
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that
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must
overcome
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 to
guarante
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guarantee
guaranty
 discussion with some
friend
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friends
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.
this
 condition influence in life, type
communication
 verbal and
non verbal
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nonverbal
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 to do
that
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. In Conclusion, I believe, that
face to
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face-to-face
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face
communication
 is much
powerful
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 and better than written
communication
. And these two reasons are the evidence of it.
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task achievement
Try to elaborate more on your reasons and examples. For instance, why do you believe face-to-face communication improves skills more effectively than written communication? Support your points with concrete examples from personal experience or societal observations.
coherence cohesion
Your essay is somewhat difficult to follow due to grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Ensure that each sentence is complete and clear. Consider using language tools or seeking feedback from a fluent English speaker to improve your writing style.
coherence cohesion
Enhance the logical flow by linking your ideas with cohesive devices. Use conjunctions and transitional phrases such as 'however,' 'moreover,' 'in addition,' and 'therefore.' This will make your argument more compelling and easier to follow.
task achievement
You have a clear standpoint in favor of face-to-face communication, and you attempt to support it with reasons and personal experience.
coherence cohesion
You included a conclusion, which provides a clear ending to your essay.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Non-verbal cues
  • Body language
  • Facial expression
  • Tone of voice
  • Misunderstandings
  • Immediate feedback
  • Clarifications
  • Rapport
  • Documentation
  • Legal agreements
  • Formal communication
  • Tech-savvy
  • Virtual meetings
  • Messaging apps
  • Community
  • Connection
  • Professional settings
  • Sensitive information
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