The table below shows statistics about the top five countries for international tourism in 2012 and 2013.

The table below shows statistics about the top five countries for international tourism in 2012 and 2013.
The table illustrates the five
countries
' rankings for international tourism in 2012 and 2013. The information includes the total number of tourist (measured in millions) and their spending over the years (measured in
billion
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billions
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US
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of US
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Dollars).
Overall
, it can clearly be seen that France was the top country with the largest number of
tourists
throughout the given period.
However
, in regard to the international visitors' spending, the USA was in the first place. In terms of the top two
countries
, the
amount
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number
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of
tourists
in France was 83.0 in 2012 and 84.7 in 2013,
while
in the USA, the total
overseas
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visitors
was
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were
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66.7 and 69.8.
However
, the tourist spending in France decreased from 53.6 to 56.1. Meanwhile, in the USA, the expenditure rose to 139.6.
Regarding the
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other three
countries
, there were Spain, China, and Italy with the number of
tourists
reaching 57.5, 57.7, and 46.4, respectively in 2012. The amount of tourist increased by around 1-2 in the next year.
Similarly
, how much money was spent by
tourists
in the three
countries
also
went up to 60.4 for Spain, 51.7 for China, and 43.9 for Italy.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, tourists with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.

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  • tourist arrivals
  • influx of tourists
  • economic impact
  • job creation
  • infrastructure development
  • revenue generation
  • geographical distribution
  • popular destination
  • regional analysis
  • natural attractions
  • cultural heritage
  • seasonal trends
  • tourism patterns
  • climatic conditions
  • tourism preferences
  • adventure tourism
  • eco-tourism
  • cultural tourism
  • holiday seasons
  • local events
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