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The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons whare relevant.

The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons whare relevant.
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The line graph illustrates thefts per thousand vehicles in four different countries in nine years. From the general
trend
 it can be seen United
Kindgom
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Kingdom
 is the country where most of the
robberies
 of cars
occured
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occurred
. France and Canada almost showed the same
trend
 as remained constant during the nine years with some fluctuations
while
increase
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the increase
an increase
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 in
number
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a number
the number
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 of
robberies
 can be seen in Sweden after 1995.
Overall
, In Great Britain a zigzag
trend
 can be noticed in
number
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a number
the number
show examples
 of car
theft
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thefts
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, from 1990-1993 it increased after that a drop can be seen,
then
number
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the number
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 of
robberies
 increased and after 1997 the
number
 dropped
off
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apply
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. In
Sweden
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Sweden,
show examples
 an upward
trend
 can be seen as
number
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a number
the number
show examples
 of
theft
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thefts
show examples
keep
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kept
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 on increasing in 1990 only 5000
robberies
 occurred and the figure escalated to 12000 in 1997 and it
keep
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kept
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 on increasing as it touched 14000 in 1999.
Furthermore
, Canada and France showed the same
trend
 with marginal differences. In 1990
number
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the number
a number
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 of
theft
 per 1000 vehicles
were
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was
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 8 and in Canada
were
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was
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 6 which dropped to 6 and 5 in 1994
then
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and then
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 peaked in 1996 after which it remained constant.
To sum up
,
In Uk
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in the UK
show examples
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the theft
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theft
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the theft
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 rate
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is
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in
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is
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 a lot and in Sweden an upward
trend
 can be noticed.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words trend, robberies, number, theft with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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