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You work in an international company. You need to take some time off work. Write a letter to your employer. In your letter:  explain why you need this time off  give details of when you want this time off  say who can do your work when you are away

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
 letter to inform you about my
timeoff
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time
in
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 next week. As you are aware of the fact that my mother suffers from bronchitis.
docters
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doctors
doctor
has
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 advised her to take care of her in hospital as her condition is not stable.
Furthermore
, I need time off between Tuesday and Wednesday dated 26,27 November 2023. I need to be with her in
hospital
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the hospital
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 as doctors will conduct numerous medical
test
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tests
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 on her. My wife and I need to take care of her in
hospital
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the hospital
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.
However
, I had requested
jim
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him
Jim
 to take care of my office duties in my absence. He will be
single
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 point of contact for any
work related
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 query on two days. I had already told him about important deadlines and he will complete those files before
deadline
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. I hope
this
 arrangement
satisy
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satisfy
 your queries with
regards
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 to work. I look forward to your response. Yours Faithfully, John Myers
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Make sure to avoid small grammatical errors. For example, 'docters has advised' should be 'doctors have advised'.
general
Revising some of the phrasing can improve clarity. For instance, 'had requested jim' should be 'have requested Jim', and 'satisfy your queries' should be 'satisfy your requirements'.
task achievement
You have clearly stated the reason for your leave and provided detailed information on the dates and arrangements.
task achievement
The letter has a polite and formal tone suitable for a letter to an employer.
coherence and cohesion
Each paragraph addresses a distinct point, contributing to a clear and logical structure.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • requesting time off
  • minimal disruption
  • capable colleague
  • cover responsibilities
  • workload management
  • urgent tasks
  • accessible
  • considering your request
  • contribute more effectively
  • appreciate
  • temporary absence
  • proactive planning
  • smooth transition
  • alternative arrangement
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