Write about the following topic: As the internet becomes more popular, newspapers are becoming a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.

Nowadays it is easy to read the
news
in many different ways than in the past. We can get lots of
informations
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information
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from the
internet
that in the past would only be
on
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in
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the
newspaper
. Some people believe that in the future there will not be
newspapers
. I agree with
this
statement.
Firstly
getting
informations
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information
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from the
internet
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Internet
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are
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is
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much more
convenience
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convenient
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than from a
newspaper
. You can read
news
on the
internet
in
anyplace
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any place
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and at
anytime
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any time
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for example
on your computer at work or on your smartphone when you are on the bus. Reading a
newspaper
means that you will need to go to the shop
for buying
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to buy
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a
newspaper
and
be
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carry it with you.
This
is not as
convenience
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as reading on the
internet
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Internet
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.
Secondly
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news
on the
internet
are
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is
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much faster than
news
in the
newspaper
.
News
in the
newspaper
can only be about yesterday or before. All
newspapers
are
wrote
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the day before they
are sell
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are sold
are selling
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in
theshops
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the shops
. With the
internet
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internet,
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you can read as soon as a story happens.
This
way you get
news
much more
quicker
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quickly
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.
Finally
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there are more stories on the
internet
for
news
. When I read a story on the
internet
I can read different writers opinion about the
news
.
i
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I
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think
this
is
good
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a good
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thing because you understand more things about the
news
. In
conclusion
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conclusion,
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I believe that the
internet
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Internet
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is better for
news
than
newspapers
many people who
are buy
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buy
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newspapers
now are older and for young
people
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people,
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the
newspaper
is not very important.
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language
Work on improving sentence structure to maintain grammatical accuracy. For example, 'getting informations from the internet are much more convenience' should be 'getting information from the internet is much more convenient.'
content
Try to include more specific examples to support your points, which can help in making your argument more persuasive.
coherence
Use transitional words and phrases like 'in addition,' 'furthermore,' or 'moreover' to improve the flow of your essay.
content
The essay addresses the topic well and provides a clear standpoint.
task response
The essay makes a strong case for why the internet may replace newspapers in the future, with solid reasoning and supporting points.
relevance
Good use of personal experience to underline the argument, such as reading news on the bus through a smartphone.

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