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The graph below shows the price of bananas in four different countries from 1994 to 2004.

The graph below shows the price of bananas in four different countries from 1994 to 2004.
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A glance at the graph provided reveals the
cost
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 of
bananas
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 in four various countries from 1994 to 2004.
Overall
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, one particularly interesting fact highlighted by the figure is that
to
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somewhere in the vicinity of the price of
bananas
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 in
Japan
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 was the highest in all years except for 2001.
According to
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 what is shown, banana prices in
Japan
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 had wild fluctuations as to others.
In contrast
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, the
cost
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 of
bananas
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 in the USA had the least fluctuations.
In addition
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, the trend of prices in
the
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France from 1994 to 1999 and that of Germany during one
deceade
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decade
 from 1994 to 2004 had slight fluctuations. But the
cost
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 of
bananas
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 related to France fluctuated wildly between 1999 and 2004.
Thus
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, it is reasonable to summarize that the
least
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 price of
bananas
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 was regarding the USA in 1994,
whereas
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 the highest
cost
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of
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those
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apply
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related to
Japan
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 in 1995.
Additionally
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, the trend of banana
price
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prices
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 in
Japan
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 plunged to a low of 2
dollors
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dollars
.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words cost, bananas, japan with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • comparative price trends
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • significant price fluctuations
  • dramatic rise/fall
  • comparisons
  • highest/lowest prices
  • potential reasons
  • economic conditions
  • import/export taxes
  • agricultural policies
  • external factors
  • natural disasters
  • trade agreements
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