The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean Island between 2010 and 2017.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean Island between 2010 and 2017.
The graph presents the transformation of
travelers
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visiting Caribbean
Island
over the years from 2010 to 2017. There are 2 types of
travelers
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consists of
travelers
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who
is
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staying on cruise ships and staying on the
island
. Units are in millions. In general, the number of
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has increased year by year, it reached
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3.5 million
travelers
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in 2017. Even though each
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types
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is experiencing fluctuation. There was no change in the sum total of visitors staying on cruise ships (0.75) until 2011, but
then
it doubled to 1.5 in 2013 until 2015.
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there is a slight decrease in 2016, the people who stayed on board are back to the previous amount again in 2017.
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the other hand, the quantity of
travelers
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staying on the
island
is the minority for 5 years until 2015.
However
starting in 2016, most of the
travelers
are staying on the
island
. In 2017, it broke the record as the first year there
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2 million visitors staying on the
island
over the past 7 years.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words travelers, island with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • steady increase
  • sharp decline
  • seasonal variation
  • cruise ship visitors
  • island stay visitors
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • tourism industry
  • sustainable tourism
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