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Band 5.5

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Modern transportation and shipping has made the world a better place to live. Use specific reasons and details to explain your opinion.

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Nowadays, the development of
transportation
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 and shipping has increased our life quality significantly.
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 essay agrees with
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 statement because
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 advancement has a positive impact on the tourism industry and
countries
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' economies. Advanced transport options have made international travel more affordable and accessible,
a
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and a
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growing number of tourists has lots of benefits for the public. Modern
transportation
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 systems
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 as
airplanes
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aeroplanes
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 and high-speed trains reduce travel time and allow people to connect with each other easily.
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, in the past people were not able to visit other
countries
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 for a short time.
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, by increasing the number of public
transportation
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 vehicles the cost of tickets
drop
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drops
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, so more individuals are able to afford a trip and travel to other
country
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countries
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 or
city
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cities
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 as
a
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apply
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tourist
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tourists
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 in order to get familiar
to
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with
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 other cultures and traditions. Modern shipping systems have grown the nations' economies noticeably.
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 with, by exporting and importing goods
through
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by
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 sea or air
countries
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 are able to sell their local products, in consequence of rising potential international customers the
manufactures
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manufacturers
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 have to hire more employees in order to speed up their production process.
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, some nations,
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 have modern and powerful industries, could invest in their specific product and manufacture
it
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them
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 globally.
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,
Korean
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the Korean
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 vehicle industry sends its modern car to European
countries
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 by enormous
ship
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ships
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 and improves its economy. In conclusion, the progress in
transportation
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 and shipping not only improves people's lives but
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 grows the nation's finances. In my opinion, these advancement has positive impacts for everyone.

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coherence cohesion
Work on ensuring that each paragraph is focused on a single main idea, and avoid mixing different points in one paragraph. For instance, the first paragraph discusses both tourism and affordability—consider splitting these into distinct points.
task achievement
Pay close attention to the clarity of ideas. For example, the sentence about people not being able to visit other countries for a short time in the past is somewhat vague. Be specific about how modern transportation has changed this.
coherence cohesion
The essay is well-structured with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.
task achievement
Relevant and specific examples, such as the Korean vehicle industry, effectively support the arguments.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Global connectivity
  • Cultural exchange
  • International relations
  • Economic growth
  • Efficient shipping methods
  • Global trade
  • Quality of life
  • Job opportunities
  • Environmental impact
  • Carbon emissions
  • Emergency response
  • Disaster relief
  • Tourism industry
  • Affordable and accessible
  • Cultural appreciation
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