A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter explain why you think your friend would enjoy camping describe some possible disadvantages say whether you would like to go camping with your friend
Dear Julia,
I hope
this
letter finds you in great health and you are doing well there, how are you, girl ? long time no saw you, since we are finished our France course. I really miss you and my mother always ask
about you. I am writing Correct subject-verb agreement
asks
this
letter to give you advice about you
plan to take Correct pronoun usage
your
camping
holiday Add an article
a camping
in
Change preposition
apply
this
summer.
Based on my perspective, This
event have
a lot of benefits for you. Change the verb form
has
Moreover
, you are is busy person in my point of view going on a camping holiday can refresh your brain and you can feel different circumstance
.
Fix the agreement mistake
circumstances
In addition
, there are also
has
several disadvantages if you do that. Unnecessary verb
apply
Consequently
, this
is
can Unnecessary verb
apply
spent
your energy Verb problem
waste
hence
you can not concentration
when you work after Replace the word
concentrate
join with
Wrong verb form
joining
this
agenda. Furthermore
, you also
could spend numerous
Correct word choice
apply
you
money Change the pronoun
your
it
will Correct pronoun usage
which
harms
your Change the verb form
harm
financial
.
I would apologize to you that I can not join Replace the word
finances
with
you Change preposition
apply
due to
I have a large number of activities this
month. I have to go to Singapore to meet with my client for
make some deals with him.
Once again, thank you for your time and I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.
Yours sincerely,
Xhiexie.Change preposition
to
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coherence cohesion
Ensure your letter has a logical structure. Each paragraph should present a single idea clearly.
coherence cohesion
Pay attention to sentence structure and grammar to enhance clarity.
task achievement
The letter addresses all parts of the task: reasons to enjoy camping, possible disadvantages, and whether you can join.
task achievement
The tone is friendly and appropriate for a letter to a friend.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite
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