A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter explain why you think your friend would enjoy camping describe some possible disadvantages say whether you would like to go camping with your friend

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Dear Julia, I hope

this

letter finds you in great health and you are doing well there, how are you, girl ? long time no saw you, since we are finished our France course. I really miss you and my mother always

ask

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about you. I am writing

this

letter to give you advice about

you

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your

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plan to take

camping

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a camping

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holiday

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apply

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this

summer. Based on my perspective,

This

event

have

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a lot of benefits for you.

Moreover

, you are is busy person in my point of view going on a camping holiday can refresh your brain and you can feel different

circumstance

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circumstances

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In addition

, there are

also

has

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several disadvantages if you do that.

Consequently

this

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can

spent

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waste

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your energy

hence

you can not

concentration

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when you work after

join with

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joining

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this

agenda.

Furthermore

, you

also

could spend

numerous

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apply

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you

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your

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money

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will

harms

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your

financial

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. I would apologize to you that I can not join

with

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you

due to

I have a large number of activities

this

month. I have to go to Singapore to meet with my client

for

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make some deals with him. Once again, thank you for your time and I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours sincerely, Xhiexie.

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coherence cohesion

Ensure your letter has a logical structure. Each paragraph should present a single idea clearly.

coherence cohesion

Pay attention to sentence structure and grammar to enhance clarity.

task achievement

The letter addresses all parts of the task: reasons to enjoy camping, possible disadvantages, and whether you can join.

task achievement

The tone is friendly and appropriate for a letter to a friend.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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8
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
18
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

208 words

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