The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean Island between 2010 and 2017.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean Island between 2010 and 2017.
The line graph provides key information about the total number of
visitors
for
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the
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particular Caribbean
island
form
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from
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2010 to 2017. The units are measured in figures.
Ovarall
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Overall
, it is clear from the graph that the total
numbers
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number
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of
tourisits
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tourists
represented a significant
increase
over the course.
In addition
, the amount of
visitors
stauing
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staying
on cruise ships showed a gradual
increase
.
Whereas
, the tourists staying on the
island
contributed
a
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gradual decline.
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what is
showen
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shown
in the
fist
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first
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two years the total numbers
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showed
shown
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a modest
increase
about
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1,5
Millions
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of
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visitors
.
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,
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the accommodations on the
island
showd
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showed
shows
a remaind ratio in the first year, other
visitors
staying on cruise ships increased slowly
about
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500 thousand
visitors
. Following
to
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the next year the total figures still increased in a significant way almost 2.5
millions
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.
Subsequently
,
visitors
on the
shpis
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ships
showd
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showed
show
shows
a fluctuating ratio
then
increased
around
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one
million
in 2014, tourists on
island
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the island
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increased up to 1.5
million
and
reamind
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remind
remained
stable tell 2015. In terms of the second period from 2014 to 2017
visitors
on the ships sowed a gradual
increase
to the peak of 2
million
tourists.
However
,
visitors
on the
island
declined
around
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800
thousands
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in 2016
then
increased to 1.5
million
in 2017.
According to
that the total numbers showed a substantial amount
in
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the end of
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the peroid
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peroid
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period
in 2017 almost 3.5
millions
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million
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of
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visitors
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to".
Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, island, increase, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 9 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • steady increase
  • sharp decline
  • seasonal variation
  • cruise ship visitors
  • island stay visitors
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • tourism industry
  • sustainable tourism
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