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task achievement
Your essay addresses both views and provides your own opinion. To enhance task response, ensure that each argument is fully explored with specific and relevant examples.
coherence cohesion
While your essay has a logical structure and both an introduction and conclusion are present, try to make transitions between paragraphs smoother to improve coherence and cohesion.
supported main points
Support your main points with more detailed examples and explanations. This will make your arguments stronger and more convincing.
task achievement
It is commendable that you have discussed both viewpoints and provided a clear conclusion.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.
task achievement
The topic is understood well and both sides of the argument are presented.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.