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Some people think that a srnsr if competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children woh are taught to co-operate rather than competemore useful adults. Discuss bothviews and give your opinion.

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It is said by some,
children
 should be studied atmosphere
competition
.
However
, others consider that pupils who learn to collaborate
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,
competition
 is more useful for
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. In my opinion, both of them have benefits.
Nonetheless
,
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 teaching style is better. There are some reasons
of
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 teaching with
competition
.
Firstly
, it gives motivation to
children
 and they can
work
 harder.
Secondly
,
children
 who are taught with
competition
 are better than other
children
. S a consequence
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that
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,
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juveniles
 have self-esteem
themself
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and
also
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work
.
Furthermore
,
development
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 of their
work
 has faster progress and had healthy rivalry than others.
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people
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the
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 job and
this
 teaching system provides with job in that situation. 25 per cent of
people
 pass
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job interviews
via
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this
 way throughout the world. Because
,
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 they are taught with
competetive
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competitive
 inspiration. If they do not study with
competition
 , they may not pass the interview. All in all, teaching with
competition
also
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is also
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 useful for
people
 and it prepares
for
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them for
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life
. There are more beneficial sides are studied
with
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collaboration
 than
other teaching style
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. The main reason
of
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it
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is
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. To
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explain
, if
children
 are taught with
co-operation
, they can achieve their success with their colleagues.
Consequently
, they are better attitude for young
people
.
Furthermore
, they have
not
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competition
 with other
people
 .
For instance
, several
companies
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 bosses co-operate
each
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 other and they achieve high levels of development
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.
Furthermore
, studying
collaboration
 style
also
 helps for
children
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life
. Because
,
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 they can
work
together with
 junior staffs and help them. If
children
 are not taught with
co-operation
,
competition
 may increase.
To sum up
,
collaboration
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. In conclusion, to my mind, a
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competition
 and
co-operation
 have many benefits.
Nevertheless
,
collaboration
 is vital and it plays
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 role in
children'
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life
.
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