some people believe tertiary education should be free, but others say universities should charge students. discuss both viwes and give your opinin.
It is said that
although
a group of individuals present the view that it is necessary for Linking Words
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university
to charge Fix the agreement mistake
universities
students
, Use synonyms
whereas
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some
others are of the opinion that tertiary education should be free. I strongly Correct quantifier usage
apply
agree
the former opinion.
On the one hand, some Add the preposition
agree on
agree to
agree with
people
justifiably argue that charging Use synonyms
students
for Use synonyms
universities
leads to more studying with better quality, so they can pass their courses in a timely manner. Use synonyms
Otherwise
, they should pay tuition for each extra educational course which did not pass on time. Linking Words
In addition
, Linking Words
as a result
of not being free tuition for Linking Words
universities
, the government can invest Use synonyms
on
the other part of development. Change preposition
in
Due to
the fact that Linking Words
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universities'
university's
universities
expenditures are money consuming Change noun form
universities'
such
asLinking Words
,
laboratory instruments and different facilities. They impose expenses on the government Remove the comma
apply
then
emitting them provides opportunities for construction infrastructures.
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On the other hand
, another group of Linking Words
people
claim that Use synonyms
as a result
of free tertiary Linking Words
education
each person can benefit from Add a comma
education,
this
option. They insist that if it is not necessary to think about Linking Words
university
tuition, the difference between rural and urban Use synonyms
students
is more likely would be emitted. So that it leads to equality in educational access. Another perceived Use synonyms
benefits
Fix the agreement mistake
benefit
for
not charging Change preposition
of
Use synonyms
university
is that it gives rise to Fix the agreement mistake
universities
increasing
willingness among Add an article
an increasing
people
to benefit from tertiary education. Use synonyms
As a result
of obtaining higher Linking Words
qualification
, better job opportunities would be proposed. Fix the agreement mistake
qualifications
However
, in my view, Linking Words
this
argument is not valid since most Linking Words
people
can get a loan. Use synonyms
Furthermore
, they can benefit from other short-term Linking Words
placement
in order to learn Fix the agreement mistake
placements
job
or get a promotion.
Add an article
a job
To conclude
, in my view, I completely believe Linking Words
universities
should charge Use synonyms
students
. Because it helps the quality of the Use synonyms
university
grow a step ahead and controls money consumption for the government.Use synonyms
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