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Band 5.5

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good you want to tell how you feel. Write a letter to the singer.

#concert #singers #singer
Dear Tulus I hope you are doing great, my name is Nurul Hikmah.
Iam
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I am
 from Sumbawa.
First,
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 am
wiritig
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writing
this
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feel
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 about
you
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 performance yesterday At Gelora Studion, as you know
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am
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 very into
to
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you since
i
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am
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 in middle school. I want you
know
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i
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 am delighted
due
to
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 your performance,
last
 year when you
comed
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 to show
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unfortunately
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i
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cannot
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 see you because
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 was doing
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a tesis
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tesis
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this
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i
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 do not have
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change
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chance
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 to see you. But
finally
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 you
come
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 again to
concert
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the concert
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 here. In
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fact
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 you are
very
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 handsome and sweet person. your voice
so
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 smooth and nice.
Neverthelees
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Nevertheless
, when
i
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 want
took
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picture
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a picture
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 with you yesterday, your
assistand
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assistant
not
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does not
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 allow me, probably because you felt
exshausted
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exhausted
.
However
,
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want
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 invite my friends to show your performance again.
In addition
,
that is
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 opportunity for me, i
hopefully
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 you can come again and take
picture
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 with me, i am so
sory
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sorry
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intterup
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interrupt
your time. and thank you for your best concert yesterday. Sincerely Nurul
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Grammar
Work on correcting grammatical errors such as subject-verb agreement and proper tense usage. This will improve the readability of your letter.
Organization
Try to structure your paragraphs so that each one focuses on a single idea. This will help improve the coherence of your writing.
Content
You effectively communicated your feelings and experiences, which is central to the task.
Tone
Your use of a respectful and admiring tone is suitable for the intended audience.
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