Some people believe that sports are an essential part of school life for children while you should give reasons for your answers and include. ideas and examples

Many
people
trust that
sport
very
essential
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or good part of
school
life for
pupil
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pupils
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.
This
issue is very simple to discuss because a lot of
people
have
doing
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some
sports
due to
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because
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,
sport
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sports
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very
curcial
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crucial
for
human
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humans
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specifically
Children
. I will give any reason in the following
esay
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essay
.
To begin
with,
sport
very
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important. Nowadays, a lot of
people
have been doing
variety
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of
sport
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sports
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such
as
,
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cycling, swimming, badminton and
socer
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soccer
. not only
a
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apply
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teenager
teeneger
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teenager
and
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adults
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adult
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but
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children
chilldren
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children
also
. because
sport
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sports
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very
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is very
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curcial
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crucial
, other
people
believe that
school
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schools
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have to any
sports
at
the
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apply
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school
since
in
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elementary
school
, because
children
can
learning
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learn
be learning
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soon as possible and that can shape their
body
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bodies
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.
However
,
add
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adding
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any
sports
in
school
have
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has
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a
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apply
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many advantages,
such
as,
train
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training
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their body and brain. Not only that
school
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schools
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can introduce a variety of
sports
to
children
. In my
opinion
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opinion,
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every
school
have to
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has
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a rule for
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a
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apply
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sport
as a subject, that can make
pupil
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pupils
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learn about
sport
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sports
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since
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from
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we
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they
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were
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a child
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child
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children
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.
For instance
, when
i
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I
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am in senior high
scool
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school
. I
am join
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some race
sport
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sports
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that
is
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as
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high jump
sport
, before that. I felt very difficult because
i
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never
join to
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joined
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any
sports
before, so
that
is
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was
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very hard for me,
fortunatelly
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fortunately
unfortunately
my coach
very
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was very
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patiens
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patient
patients
to teach
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in teaching
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me,
then
i
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I
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got
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was
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winner
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the winner
a winner
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in the high jump
sport
.
that is
mean
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means
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sport
very
curcial
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crucial
and have to take
a
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part
of
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in
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all
school
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schools
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because if some
school
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schools
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just train their student any
sport
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sports
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when in senior high
school
, I sure students or
children
will
be feel
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difficult when
their
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they
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join
to
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apply
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some race in the future.
Neverthelees
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Nevertheless
, if the
school
take
a
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part
of
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in
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the sport
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sport
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, they have to choose the best
sport
for the
children
who
still
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are still
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in elementary
school
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schools
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,
such
as badminton,
socer
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soccer
, and traditional
sport
.
instead
a
sport
like
basket ball
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basketball
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, climbing and swimming. I think that
sports
match
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matches
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for
teeneger
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teenagers
or
adult
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adults
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. In conclusion,
sport
very
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curcial
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crucial
at
school
because
besaide
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beside
besides
that can make
a
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good
healthy
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health
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, those
also
can
make
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help
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children
train their
body
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bodies
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, and
school
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schools
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have to choose a good kind of
sport
for their students.
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