Some people believe that sports are an essential part of school life for children while you should give reasons for your answers and include. ideas and examples

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Many

people

trust that

sport

very

essential

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or good part of

school

life for

pupil

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pupils

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This

issue is very simple to discuss because a lot of

people

have

doing

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done

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some

sports

due to

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because

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sport

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sports

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very

curcial

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crucial

for

human

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humans

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specifically

Children

. I will give any reason in the following

esay

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essay

To begin

with,

sport

very

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is very

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important. Nowadays, a lot of

people

have been doing

variety

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a variety

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sport

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sports

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such

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apply

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cycling, swimming, badminton and

socer

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soccer

. not only

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apply

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teenager

teeneger

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teenager

and

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adults

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adult

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adults

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but

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children

chilldren

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children

also

. because

sport

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sports

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very

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is very

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curcial

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crucial

, other

people

believe that

school

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schools

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have to any

sports

the

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apply

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school

since

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apply

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elementary

school

, because

children

can

learning

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learn

be learning

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soon as possible and that can shape their

body

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bodies

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However

add

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adding

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any

sports

school

have

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has

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apply

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many advantages,

such

as,

train

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training

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their body and brain. Not only that

school

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schools

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can introduce a variety of

sports

children

. In my

opinion

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opinion,

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every

school

have to

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has

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a rule for

take

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taking

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apply

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sport

as a subject, that can make

pupil

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pupils

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learn about

sport

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sports

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since

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from

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they

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were

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a child

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child

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children

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For instance

, when

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am in senior high

scool

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school

. I

am join

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am joining

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some race

sport

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sports

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that

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high jump

sport

, before that. I felt very difficult because

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never

join to

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joined

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any

sports

before, so

that

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was

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very hard for me,

fortunatelly

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fortunately

unfortunately

my coach

very

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was very

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patiens

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patient

patients

to teach

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in teaching

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me,

then

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got

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was

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winner

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the winner

a winner

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in the high jump

sport

that is

mean

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means

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sport

very

curcial

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crucial

and have to take

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apply

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part

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all

school

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schools

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because if some

school

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schools

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just train their student any

sport

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sports

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when in senior high

school

, I sure students or

children

will

be feel

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find it

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difficult when

their

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they

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join

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apply

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some race in the future.

Neverthelees

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Nevertheless

, if the

school

take

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apply

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part

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the sport

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sport

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sports

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, they have to choose the best

sport

for the

children

who

still

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are still

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in elementary

school

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schools

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such

as badminton,

socer

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soccer

, and traditional

sport

instead

sport

basket ball

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basketball

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, climbing and swimming. I think that

sports

match

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matches

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for

teeneger

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teenagers

adult

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adults

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. In conclusion,

sport

very

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is very

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curcial

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crucial

school

because

besaide

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beside

besides

that can make

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apply

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good

healthy

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health

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, those

also

can

make

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help

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children

train their

body

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bodies

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, and

school

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schools

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have to choose a good kind of

sport

for their students.

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You have a clear understanding of the importance of sports in school life and its benefits for children.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

362 words

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