Today there are a lot of websites providing news on the internet. Some people believe that these websites will totally replace traditional newspaper and magazines. To what extend do you agree or disagree?
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news
on the internet, a lot of people
today watch news
online instead
of newspaper
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people
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whether is
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people
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the news
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many reasons for that, first of all, Change the verb form
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doesn't
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a Correct subject-verb agreement
have
smart phone
or laptop today? so Correct your spelling
smartphone
people
can easily watch news
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the news
every where
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also
they can see what's going on in the hole
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was very difficult in the past because they wasn't
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apply
moreover
watch news
online makes you save your money as you will not pay for a newspaper everyday
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exactly
happen
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news
from diffirent
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Consider enhancing the clarity of your ideas by structuring them into distinct paragraphs. Start each paragraph with a clear topic sentence and develop your point logically. This will help your essay to be more coherent and cohesive.
coherence and cohesion
Work on variety in sentence structure and avoid repetition of phrases such as 'watch news online' and 'read a news'. Use synonyms or rephrase sentences to make them more engaging and less repetitive.
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Ensure all points made are backed with specific examples or detailed explanations. For instance, reasons for preferring online news can be supported with personal anecdotes or statistical data if available.
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Revise for grammatical accuracy and spelling. Paying attention to details such as 'doesn’t', 'who doesn’t have', ‘whole world’, ‘they didn’t have’, ‘read news online’, and ‘exactly’ will help in conveying your ideas more clearly.
task achievement
Your essay presents relevant reasons supporting the idea that online news is becoming more popular than traditional newspapers and magazines.
task achievement
Your conclusion summarizes your opinion clearly about preferring online news over traditional newspapers and emphasizes the importance of reliability in sources.
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