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Today there are a lot of websites providing news on the internet. Some people believe that these websites will totally replace traditional newspaper and magazines. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Today there are a lot of websites providing
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 on the internet, a lot of
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 today watch
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 will talk about why
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 say, many
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 online and there
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 many reasons for that, first of all,
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 or laptop today? so
people
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news
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every where
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, every time
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a few seconds,
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any smart devices so they can only know what's happened in where they live or around,
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 online makes you save your money as you will not pay for a newspaper
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,
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exactly
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different
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 absolutely agree
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with reading
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online, just
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are
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 not fake and it's easy to make sure about the
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 smart devices by searching
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the internet

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coherence and cohesion
Consider enhancing the clarity of your ideas by structuring them into distinct paragraphs. Start each paragraph with a clear topic sentence and develop your point logically. This will help your essay to be more coherent and cohesive.
coherence and cohesion
Work on variety in sentence structure and avoid repetition of phrases such as 'watch news online' and 'read a news'. Use synonyms or rephrase sentences to make them more engaging and less repetitive.
task achievement
Ensure all points made are backed with specific examples or detailed explanations. For instance, reasons for preferring online news can be supported with personal anecdotes or statistical data if available.
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Revise for grammatical accuracy and spelling. Paying attention to details such as 'doesn’t', 'who doesn’t have', ‘whole world’, ‘they didn’t have’, ‘read news online’, and ‘exactly’ will help in conveying your ideas more clearly.
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Your essay presents relevant reasons supporting the idea that online news is becoming more popular than traditional newspapers and magazines.
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Your conclusion summarizes your opinion clearly about preferring online news over traditional newspapers and emphasizes the importance of reliability in sources.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Accessibility: the quality of being easy to obtain or use.
  • Digitalization: the process of converting information into a digital format.
  • Subscription model: a business model where customers pay regularly to access a product or service.
  • Immediacy: the quality of bringing one into direct and instant involvement with something.
  • Eco-conscious: caring and concerned about the environment.
  • Credibility: the quality of being trusted and believed in.
  • Misleading information: information that gives the wrong idea or impression.
  • Tactile: related to the sense of touch.
  • Nostalgia: a sentimental longing for the past.
  • Screen glare: the bright and distracting reflection on a screen from a light source.
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