The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagrams show
statistic
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statistical
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information regarding the ages of the
habitants
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inhabitants
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of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and
also
a
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an
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estimative
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estimate
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for 2050. We can see that in 2000 the majority of
people
in Yemen
was
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were
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between 0 and 14
years
old,
whith
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with
which
50.1%,
whereas
in Italy most of the population was between 15- 59
years
old (61.6%), in the same year.
On the other hand
, just 3.6% of
people
in the former country
was
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were
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60
years
old or
more
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older
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in 2000,
while
in the latter
country
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country,
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this
figure is represented
with
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24.1%. The projections for 2050 show that the number of
people
with 15-59
years
and 60
years
or more will increase in Yemen, reaching 57.3% and 5.7% respectively.
In contrast
, in Italy, the population with 15-59
years
will
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old will
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decrease to 46.2%,
while
people
with 60
years
or more will grow to 42.3%
Overall
, it is possible to see that there is an upward trend
on
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the rates of
people
with 60
years
or more in both countries.
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