Animal are in danger of extinction. Some people say that we should protect only those animals which are useful to humans. Do you agree or disagree with this?
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animals
which are served to nation
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the nation
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in particular
.
I totally disagree with this
opinion, because animals
are the majorrest
source in our world.
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major
animals
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animals'
animal's
rights
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on that Correct your spelling
depend
no body
can allow on limits. Correct your spelling
nobody
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, In the USA there are goverments
to keep Correct your spelling
governments
animals
be good health and it can Add a missing verb
be multaply
multaply
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multiply
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.
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capital
capable
In addition
, the organisions
of Correct your spelling
organisations
animals
rights
have to protect animals
which is mean
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means
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build
a new zoos
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new zoos
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take
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taking
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for Correct your spelling
judgment
any body
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anybody
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, in my country especially on
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in
Riyadh
we observe that there are Add a comma
Riyadh,
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of Correct your spelling
various
animals
in the same way, a munsirtay of animals
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animal
rights
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do not care about it . Not only Correct your spelling
anyone
animals
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animals'
animal's
rights
but also
life is accourding
on Correct your spelling
according
diffirences
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differences
resoures
equally Correct your spelling
resources
animals
, fosil
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fossil
fose
and humans. If we can not protect those Correct your spelling
force
foes
animals
we will facing
problems .
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face
be facing
To sum up
, to keep our world wide
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worldwide
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apply
therefore
we have to take all actions to provide posituve
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positive
resourse
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resource
resources
then
it will give us resolves quick
. Through Change the word
quickly
this
life
we notice that Add a comma
life,
animals
any
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have any
kinds
of it, even though it Fix the agreement mistake
kind
improve
and Correct subject-verb agreement
improves
added
value Wrong verb form
adds
for
our Change preposition
to
life
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lives
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we have to awaer our nations how learn Wrong verb form
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with
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about
animls
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animals
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with a
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different types
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