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The graph below show the number of hours spent on social media per day from 2010to 2016 as well as the reasons why they used them. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting.

The graph below show the number of hours spent on social media per day from 2010to 2016 as well as the reasons why they used them. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting.
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The bar graph depicts the
percentage
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 of
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business
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businesses
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 with a social media presence from 2010 to 2016.It is clear from the graph that the ratio of a large
business
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 with social networks dominated the highest
rate
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compare
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 to other
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business
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businesses
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 between 2012 to 2016 .
According to
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 what is shown, in 2012 the
rate
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 of large
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business
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businesses
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 with websites reached the highest orotund of 79%
while
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 in 2015 the
percentage
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 sharply decreased which was 50%. In 2013 ,2012 and 2014 had the same value about 82% approximately.
On the other hand
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 . The medium
business
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rate
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 with social media rose to 60 in 2016 and significantly decreased to 30 in 2015
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and 2012
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 the ratio increased to 50% in 2015 and 2013. The average
percentage
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 of small with social media fluctuated between 2013
to2015
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to 2015
 about 30 39 approximately. the subsequent year, the
rate
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 peaked at 50 %. To sum we could say the large
business
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 had the largest
percentage
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.
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