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The graph below show the number of hours spent on social media per day from 2010to 2016 as well as the reasons why they used them. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting.

The graph below show the number of hours spent on social media per day from 2010to 2016 as well as the reasons why they used them. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting.
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The bar graph depicts the
percentage
 of
business
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businesses
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 with a social media presence from 2010 to 2016.It is clear from the graph that the ratio of a large
business
 with social networks dominated the highest
rate
compare
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 to other
business
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businesses
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 between 2012 to 2016 .
According to
 what is shown, in 2012 the
rate
 of large
business
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businesses
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 with websites reached the highest orotund of 79%
while
 in 2015 the
percentage
 sharply decreased which was 50%. In 2013 ,2012 and 2014 had the same value about 82% approximately.
On the other hand
 . The medium
business
rate
 with social media rose to 60 in 2016 and significantly decreased to 30 in 2015
and2012
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and 2012
,
however
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 the ratio increased to 50% in 2015 and 2013. The average
percentage
 of small with social media fluctuated between 2013
to2015
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to 2015
 about 30 39 approximately. the subsequent year, the
rate
 peaked at 50 %. To sum we could say the large
business
 had the largest
percentage
.
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