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You live in a room in college which you can share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter • Describe the situation • Explain your problems and why it is difficult to work • Say what kind of accommodation you would prefer.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to complain
some
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 problems with the arrangement of my room which is shared with another student in the college. To clarify, I am a
medicine
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 student and I need a quiet place to meet my goals.
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, I find it difficult to concentrate
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 preparing my courses
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 several parties which is being held by my roommate on a regular basis. These parties are making a lot of
noises
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 and
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 disturbances.
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, our time for studying and college
program
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 are different.
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 she prefers to stay up late to study at night, I got used to
study
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 in the morning.
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 of
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, I cannot sleep and concentrate well. To remedy
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 situation, I suggested that you replace my room with a private one with
other medical student
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another medical student
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 in order to
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 a quiet place and optimum study plan adaptation. I hope
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 matter will be dealt with you as soon as possible. Yours faithfully, Mahshid Ka

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suitable writing tone
Ensure consistent tone and appropriate word choice throughout your letter.
complete response
Expand on how the suggested solution will benefit both yourself and your roommate.
logical structure
The letter was structured logically, with clear paragraphs for each point.
complete response
You effectively conveyed your main concerns and how they affect your studies.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • accommodation officer
  • roommate
  • share a room
  • living arrangement
  • difficult to work
  • noise levels
  • study environment
  • privacy concerns
  • alternative accommodation
  • single room
  • academic performance
  • well-being
  • respectfully request
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