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The graph shows average temperatures in Paris, Dubai and Sydney

The graph shows average temperatures in Paris, Dubai and Sydney
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The given graph chart illustrates the proportion of Thermometer readings in
Paris
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,
Dubai
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 and Sydney from behind to the end of the year. The general overview here is that, over the period, of July 1, there has been a significant
increase
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 in the country group of
Dubai
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 at 36 warmth.
However
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, in a similar month in
Dubai
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, the ratio of Sydney decreased dramatically to 13
Degrees
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.
According to
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 the data, In the country group between
Paris
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 and
Dubai
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, there were 5 and 18
degrees
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.
Furthermore
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, in February of
Paris
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, there was a significant
increase
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 from 6 to 20
degrees
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. In fact, in August of
Paris
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, there was a significant decrease from 20 to 5
degrees
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,
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, in February of
Dubai
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, there was an
increase
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 from 20 to 36
degrees
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.
also
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, In August, there was a dramatic drop from 36 to 22
degrees
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.
Furthermore
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, the ratio of Sydney began at 24
degrees
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;
however
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, in February, there was a significant decrease from 23
degrees
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 to 13
degrees
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 in July; rather, in August, there was a dramatic
increase
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 from 14 to 23
degrees
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "furthermore, however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words paris, dubai, increase, degrees with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 4 times.
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