some people believe that all children should learn a foreign language from the time they start school, while others feel it is better to wait until a child is at secondary school. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

These days learning Languages is becoming available and easy to discover,
therefore
some people consider that learning should be started from the beginning of education at
school
,
while
others argue that education must be started later.
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will explain why I believe that
children
have to start education in secondary
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this
. On the one hand, it can be understood why there exist
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who think that people should start studying languages from an early age. In society, widely spread opinion that
children
learn better because of their fresh and flexible
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. In fact, today a number of
children
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the internet
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is why it can lead to procrastination and issues related to eyes,
in addition
learning languages from the first class will help to spend time
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with
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efficiency.
Consequently
, it will save
children
from bad habits
for example
smoking, because there will be just no time for
this
.
On the other hand
, in secondary
school
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can think sensibly,
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to feel responsibility and underestimate the importance of studying and it will ease the process of learning, on top of
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child for studying and it will have passion for learning foreign language the results will be better in comparison with those who
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forced by their parents. In
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this
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language in secondary
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better and put forward several reasons
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cognitive development
  • Linguistic proficiency
  • Cultural awareness
  • Enhanced communication skills
  • Neuroplasticity
  • Language acquisition
  • Pedagogical methods
  • Curriculum constraints
  • Workload
  • Interdisciplinary connections
  • Adaptability
  • Personal experience
  • Critical thinking
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