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The bar chart and table show information about students from abroad studying in four English-speaking countries in 2004 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart and table show information about students from abroad studying in four English-speaking countries in 2004 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart and table chart
provides
Correct subject-verb agreement
provide
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inforamtion
Correct your spelling
information
 key about students in
Correct article usage
the united
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united
Capitalize word
United
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state
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States
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, great British, Australia and Canada.
misurmin
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Misurmin
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 are used
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
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second.
Overall
, in
USA
Correct article usage
the USA
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 reached
in
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apply
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170 s and
total
Add an article
the total
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 was 2% in 2004
whereas
 in
UK
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the UK
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 reached
in
Change preposition
apply
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130s and
total
Add an article
the total
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 was 9%. In 2012
USA
Correct article usage
the USA
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 and
Correct article usage
the Uk
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Uk
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UK
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 reached
at
Change preposition
apply
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nearly 240s and 200s
reaspactivly
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respectively
. And
total
Correct article usage
the total
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were
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was
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 in
USA
Correct article usage
the USA
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same
Correct article usage
the same
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of
Change preposition
in
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 2004
whereas
UK
Correct article usage
the UK
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 was 13%.
Asturalia
Correct your spelling
Australia
 in 2004 and 2014
is
Wrong verb form
was
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 130 and 170 s
respictvly
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respectively
.
Canda
Correct your spelling
Canada
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 is the lowest
between
Change preposition
among
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 the four
contries
Correct your spelling
countries
 there is no difference between 2004 to 2014 only 2%
to
Add the comma(s)
, to
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 sum up
UK
Correct article usage
the UK
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 and
then
canda
Correct your spelling
Canada
 is the highest
numbers
Fix the agreement mistake
number
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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