More and more business meeting are taking place online. What are the advantages and disadvantages of the trend ?
In
this
contemporary era internet becomes
much more popular than ever. Some Wrong verb form
has become
people
argue that in todays
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today's
business
world employees prefer online meetings
instead
of face to
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face-to-face
face
and there are several benefits of
that Change preposition
to
as
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apply
other
believe that there Fix the agreement mistake
others
is
numerous drawbacks of Change the verb form
are
non physical
web Add a hyphen
non-physical
meetings
.
However
, in this
modern days especially after the Correct determiner usage
these
Covid-19 and
lockdown period many businesses decided to continue with online conferences as they find it much more beneficial for the employees and customers Correct word choice
COVID-19
in
the same time. Change preposition
at
First
and foremost Correct article usage
The first
advantages
of online Fix the agreement mistake
advantage
meeting
is that Fix the agreement mistake
meetings
it
Correct pronoun usage
they
provides
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provide
people
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with convinience
convinience
. Correct your spelling
convenience
For instance
, when a
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apply
business
conferences take place
online, there is no need of
employees to travel to get Change preposition
for
in
the Change preposition
to
place
where it
should be, Correct pronoun usage
they
this
allow
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allows
people
to not hurry and attend the meeting at home on
their own comfort. Change preposition
in
In
the other Change preposition
On
hand
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hand,
this
can lead to save
some money Change the verb form
saving
from
travel expensesChange preposition
on
,
if the meeting Remove the comma
apply
place
are
far away and requires additional Change the verb form
is
traveling
by public transport.
Change the spelling
travelling
Furthermore
, there are several drawbacks of
Change preposition
to
this
convinient
method of making Correct your spelling
convenient
business
meetings
. By replacing face to
Add a hyphen
face-to-face
face
meeting
with online, individuals lose their abilities for socialising, they can't interact with each other and build Fix the agreement mistake
meetings
relationship
. Fix the agreement mistake
relationships
Moreover
, another major disadvantages
of online Replace the adjective
disadvantage
meetings
is immobilisation. For example
, moving is vital for human
body as it Add an article
the human
keep
blood circulation and Change the verb form
keeps
overall
health of human body, online meetings
interupt
and not Correct your spelling
interrupt
allowed
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allow
people
to move around as it
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they
takes
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take
place
at home and people
do not have a chance to travel or just to
walk to the conference centre. Fix the infinitive
apply
On the other
hand
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hand,
this
can cause seriosu
health problems for the future.
In Correct your spelling
serious
conclusion
online Add a comma
conclusion,
business
conferences has
several benefits for humanity as it provides Change the verb form
have
people
much more convinient methotd
to interact with each other, but Correct your spelling
convenient method
in
the other Change preposition
on
hand
there Add a comma
hand,
is
some drawbacks as well like immobility which can make Correct subject-verb agreement
are
people
to
suffer from different health problems.Change the verb form
apply
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