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Public libraries will soon no longer be housed in a building as all facilities and books will be available online for all to access. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of public libraries only existing online.

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What are public
libraries
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? Public
libraries
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 can be considered as a haven of knowledge. It is like a home where lovers of
books
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, knowledge, and research go to immerse themselves in their habits and meet other like-minded people.
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 technological advancement, there has been a rising need to move public
libraries
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 from physical buildings to existing online. Below, I will list the advantages and disadvantages of these
libraries
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 existing online only. The first point to note is that the internet is a large world on its own. It is a tool that helps people connect through time and space. With a public
library
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 existing online, it means there is access from people around the globe. Readers and researchers can access
books
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, journals, publications and all from their
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 at home despite being in a different location.
For example
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, a student
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researching
 Chinese history at a university in Michigan can find relevant materials needed to complete their thesis by accessing an
artcle
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article
 listed by a
library
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 in China without the need to travel thousands of kilometres to China. Another advantage would be
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 in the cost of maintenance. For a public
library
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, being housed in a building would require heavy costs some of which
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; the building rent
iteself
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itself
,
purchase
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the purchase
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 of
books
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, and
purchase
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the purchase
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 of
library
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equipments
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. They would require regular funding from NGOs, Charities, personal donations, and the government in some cases. All these can be reduced or totally avoided by making the
library
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 available online.
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, despite being a good venture, we need to look at the cons. The first thing to consider would be the loss of employment. Many librarians are having to look for alternate
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due to
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 the advancement of
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libraries
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. You can get a book
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recommendation
 by googling what you need, whereby in a physical
library
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, librarians are there to provide you with rich, personal information on
books
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 and historical facts.
Secondly
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, warmth. When you walk into a
library
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, the first thing that greets you is the warmth of walking
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 a rich atmosphere. You feel like you can find the answers to your questions if you look
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 the bookshelves long enough.
This
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 feeling cannot be found online. The
library
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 online is cold and impersonal unless you are in a study group but it does not eradicate the feeling of a one-on-one interaction with fellow readers and like minds in a physical
library
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. In conclusion, there has to be a balance between the two. Physical
libraries
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 can be kept and preserved as
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landmark
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 which adds to the social and cultural heritage of an environment
while
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 online
libraries
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 can be made available for quick access and a testament to
techinal
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technical
 advancement in the Knowledge and Research field.

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Grammar
The essay should be proofread to correct minor grammatical errors and typos, such as 'iteself' instead of 'itself' and 'recommenation' instead of 'recommendation'.
Task Response
In the introduction, you could introduce the topic by mentioning the evolving role of public libraries before diving into the advantages and disadvantages. This will set a clear context for your discussion.
Coherence and Cohesion
Add a few transitional phrases or linking words to improve the flow between paragraphs. For example, use phrases like 'On the other hand,' or 'In addition' to guide the reader through your points.
Task Response
You provided a balanced discussion with both advantages and disadvantages, which successfully addresses the task requirement.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. It makes it easy to follow your arguments.
Task Response
The use of a concrete example, like a student in Michigan accessing a Chinese library online, effectively supports your point. Specific examples help clarify your arguments.

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