The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two pie charts represent the retail stores selling
via
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online since 2005 with
projection
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for 2010 in Canada.There were four retail
store
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in
this
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survey which were
electronics
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and appliances, food and beverage , home
furnitures
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furniture
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and video games. In 2005,the highest proportion of online
selling
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was
electronics
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and appliances-35
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percent
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and the lowest proportion was video games-18
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.
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,in 2010, most of Canada’s
consumer
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spent their
money
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on
electronics
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and appliances ,but
people
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spent
money
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on food and beverage in the lowest percentage.
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, comparing between 2005 and 2010,
people
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bought more
on
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online shopping in food and beverage- increasing 10
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percent
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and video games- rising 5
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percent
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.
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people
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spent less
money
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on furniture-decreasing 10
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percent
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Overall
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,it can be seen from the pie charts that the highest percentage of
people
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consumed
in
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electronics
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and appliances in both 2005 and 2010.
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,
consumer
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consumers
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spent
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less
money
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on online shopping
in
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home
furnitures
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furniture
types of furniture
pieces of furniture
items of furniture
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electronics, percent, money, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • distribution
  • percentage
  • sector
  • sales figures
  • revenue
  • growth
  • decline
  • stable
  • significant
  • leading
  • least performing
  • comparison
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • online shopping
  • retail sectors
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