The diagram below shows the process for producing bricks Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The diagram below shows the process for producing bricks

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The diagram shows the act
that is
used to produce
bricks
for the building industry.
Overall
, there are several stages which was consist of beginning with the digging up of
clay
and finishing with
delivery
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the delivery
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of
bricks
to
the
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their destination.
The
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In the
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first step, the
clay
is obtained on the ground by using a large digger
than
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then
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the
clay
is inserted onto a metal grid, which is used to
divided
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the
clay
into smaller pieces and a roller will
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in
this
work. After that, sand and water are mixed
to
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into
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the
clay
, and
this
composite is rotated into
bricks
by either placing it into a mould or using a wire cut.
Thereafter
,
bricks
left
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for 24-48 hours
to
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in
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drying oven to dry. In the subsequent stage, the
bricks
sent
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to a warming and cooling process and they are heated in a kiln at a middle
then
a high temperature ( range from 200c to 1300c),followed by a cooling act in a cooling chamber for 48-72 hours. Ultimately, the
bricks
are packed
an
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and
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delivered to their clients.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words bricks, clay with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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