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The floor plans below show the changes that were made to a house over a six-month period.

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The images illustrate the adjustments that took place in a residential structure. The main difference is that the
remodeled
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 building has one less inside
wall
.
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, looking at the central entrance to the house, there is no longer a front porch in the updated house. The left side of
this
 house
also
 had an interior
wall
 taken out between the sitting room and kitchen to make it
bigger
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 living area, with a table for dining placed in the
center
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. On
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the right
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right hand
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 side of the kitchen,
cooking
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the cooking
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 zone was moved to its right-hand
wall
where as
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rear
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the rear
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 part of the kitchen does not have space for eating anymore. On
back
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 side of
bathroom
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the bathroom
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 there are two toilets
instead
 of
bath
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a bath
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 and
wash up
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 bowls were substituted by
showerhead
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a showerhead
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. Both bedrooms now lack wardrobes. At the same
time
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 one window has been removed from behind
bedroom
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the bedroom
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while
 another front room has
small
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 opening on its
wall
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introduction conclusion present
Ensure that your introduction clearly summarizes the main features or changes described in the floor plans. Currently, the introduction is very brief and lacks specificity.
introduction conclusion present
Consider including a concluding sentence or paragraph that summarizes the overall changes to the house. This will provide closure to your essay and reinforce the main points.
logical structure
Work on organizing your essay into clear paragraphs, each focused on a specific part of the house or type of change. This will make your writing more structured and easier to follow.
logical structure
Use more varied linking words and phrases to connect your ideas and ensure your essay flows smoothly from one point to the next. This will improve coherence and make your writing more engaging.
supported main points
Expand on each change with more specific details and examples to fully support your main points. This will help you achieve a higher score in task achievement.
clear comprehensive ideas
Ensure that each sentence clearly and accurately describes the changes shown in the floor plans. Rephrasing some sentences might help to clarify your ideas and avoid confusion.
relevant specific examples
Check for consistency and accuracy in your descriptions. For instance, ensure that all changes mentioned align with the provided floor plans and that the terminology is used correctly.
complete response
Your essay successfully identifies the key changes made to the house over a six-month period, providing a clear comparison between the original and updated floor plans.
supported main points
You have highlighted specific changes to different parts of the house, such as the removal of a wall and the relocation of the kitchen area, which adds depth to your analysis.
clear comprehensive ideas
The language used is generally clear and understandable, making it easy to follow your descriptions and points.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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