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The graph shows average temperatures in Paris, Dubai and Sydney

The graph shows average temperatures in Paris, Dubai and Sydney
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The provided line chart illustrates the average temperatures in three
defferent
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different
 countries in
defferent
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different
region
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 in the interval from January to December.
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, What stands out is that Dubai's numbers outnumber the others and
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as
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the
hotest
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 throughout the summer
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 Sydney is the coldest relatively. With regards to Dubai, the temperature
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 moderately in the first three months and outraced Sydney's one in March.
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, the red line will have a noticeable growth and continue until it
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 a peak at just above 35.
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, the numbers will
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 dramatically in a
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 period
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 become around 20. Meanwhile, the trajectory of
paris
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 was almost as some as Dubai with a significant
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 from 5 to 15 Celcius in May.
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,
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 slight upward movement could be seen before it
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 to its peak at 20
Culcius
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Celsius
.
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, the temperature will level off between July and August before it nosedived to an identical level of January.
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, in Sydney, the
statistic
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 dip over the interval with a range of approximately 24C in the first month of the year and about 23C in the
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 one.
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