The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opended in one country between 2011 and 2018.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opended in one country between 2011 and 2018.
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The line graph demonstrates the
closures
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and
openings
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of the shop in a nation from 2011 to 2018.
Overall
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, the number of
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overtakes that of
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at the end
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. There is a huge drop
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new
shops
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in one year before the
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. Interestingly, the trend
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shows that the
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seems
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to decrease continuously. In 2011, the
openings
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were at their peak at over 8,000
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.
However
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, it dropped to 4,000 a year later.
This
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bounced back to 6,000 and down to 4,000 before remaining stable at around 4,000 until 2017. In
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2018, the number of
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fell to
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lowest point at 3,000. For the
closures
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it is clear that
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the
shops
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closed in 2011 started at around 6,500
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and fluctuated between 6,000 and 7,000 before coming down to 6,500 in 2014. It is the alarming drop, which took place in 2015 as the
closures
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came to about 500
shops
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before it skyrocketed to a little above 5,000 where it remained stable until 2018.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words closures, openings, shops with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • decline
  • surge
  • stabilize
  • correlation
  • economic conditions
  • consumer behavior
  • technological advancements
  • urban development
  • employment
  • retail sector
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