The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opended in one country between 2011 and 2018

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opended in one country between 2011 and 2018
The line graph reviews the closures and openings of shops in one nation from 2011 to 2018.
Overall
,both graphs start with a larger
number
and end with a decreasing
number
. The
number
of
stores
that
initially
opened was more than the
stores
that closed, but by the time it was over the
number
of
stores
that had closed would have been greater. Both graphs probably won’t go up any more than
this
.
In
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2011, was the year that
the
Correct article usage
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most
stores
were opened with 8,500
stores
and 6,500
stores
closed. In 2012, the
number
of
stores
that
opening
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opened
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decreased the fastest,
while
the
number
of
stores
closed continued to decrease gradually.
In
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From
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2012 to 2014 the
stores
Correct quantifier usage
number of stores
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that
opening
Wrong verb form
opened
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increased consistently, but the
number
of closed shops increased and decreased remained the same. In 2015, the
number
of
stores
opened dropped to 4,000 and constantly to 2017 and decreased to 3,000 shops in 2018. In 2015, the
number
of
stores
that closed enormously was only 500
stores
and in 2016 it increased greatly to 5,000
stores
and remained constant until 2018.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, stores with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.

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