The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
The line graph demonstrates the
number
of
shops
that closed and opened
during
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between
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2011 and 2018 in one country.
Overall
, the
number
of
shops
that opened
are
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is
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higher than the
number
of
shops
that closed
in
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at
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the beginning of the graph. These numbers of
shops
have increased and decreased.
At the end
of the graph,
it is clear that
the
number
of closing
shops
overtake
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the
number
of opening
shops
. The
number
of
shops
that opened started from 8,500
shops
in 2011 and decreased to 4,000
shops
in 2012.
However
, in 2014 the
number
of
shops
that opened increased to 6,000
shops
. Four years later, the
number
of opening
shops
decreased to 3,000
shops
. The
number
of closed
shops
started with less than 7,000
shops
in 2011. Two years after that, the
number
of
shops
that closed increased gradually to a little over 7,000
shops
.
Nevertheless
, in 2015 the
number
of closed
shops
greatly decreased to less than 1,000
shops
. Three years later, the
number
of
shops
that closed increased again to 5,000
shops
.
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  • fluctuation
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