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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
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The line graph demonstrates the
number
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 of
shops
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 that closed and opened
during
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between
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 2011 and 2018 in one country.
Overall
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, the
number
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 of
shops
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 that opened
are
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is
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 higher than the
number
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 of
shops
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 that closed
in
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at
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 the beginning of the graph. These numbers of
shops
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 have increased and decreased.
At the end
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 of the graph,
it is clear that
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 the
number
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 of closing
shops
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overtake
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overtakes
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 the
number
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 of opening
shops
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. The
number
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 of
shops
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 that opened started from 8,500
shops
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 in 2011 and decreased to 4,000
shops
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 in 2012.
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, in 2014 the
number
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 of
shops
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 that opened increased to 6,000
shops
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. Four years later, the
number
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 of opening
shops
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 decreased to 3,000
shops
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. The
number
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 of closed
shops
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 started with less than 7,000
shops
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 in 2011. Two years after that, the
number
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 of
shops
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 that closed increased gradually to a little over 7,000
shops
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.
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, in 2015 the
number
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 of closed
shops
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 greatly decreased to less than 1,000
shops
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. Three years later, the
number
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 of
shops
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 that closed increased again to 5,000
shops
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.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, shops with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 13 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • decline
  • surge
  • stabilize
  • correlation
  • economic conditions
  • consumer behavior
  • technological advancements
  • urban development
  • employment
  • retail sector
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