Some people argue that holding sporting events is beneficial to a country’s development. However, other people hold the opposite opinion. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some are of the opinion that if a nation
host
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a sport's
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sport's
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sports
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affair, it would aid in
country's
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the country's
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overall
growth.
However
,
other's
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others
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contradict the aforementioned idea. I believe that conducting
sport's
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sports
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events
have
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both
merit's
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merits
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and
demerit's
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which shall be discussed in the following passages.
Firstly
,
game's
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games
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are getting very popular through
internet
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the internet
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and other social media
platform
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platforms
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.
Hence
, every
country
would like to arrange big competitive
game's
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games
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where
,
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they invite neighbouring countries to come and play in their
home land
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homeland
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where they will gain recognition.
This
create's
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creates
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a
plathora
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plethora
of
opportunity
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opportunities
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to increase in
countries
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country
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revenue because many
people
will visit their
country
resulting
a
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in a
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hike in tourism, which in turn helps small business
owner's
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owners
owner
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earn huge
earning's
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earnings
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and increase
in
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apply
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job opportunities for the locals.
For example
, when
USA
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the USA
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conducted
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the olympic
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olympic
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Olympic
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games, it
has
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had
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the highest record of
tourist
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tourists
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enter
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entering
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their
country
and earned nearly 5 million dollars in
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the hotel's
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hotel's
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hotels
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,
food's
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food
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and
tourist's
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tourist
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sector
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sectors
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. Having said that, there are
also
some
concern's
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concerns
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with
this
phenomenon.
Foreigner's
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Foreigners
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who visit
new
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a new
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land, do not understand the culture or
custom's
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customs
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and end up
upseting
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upsetting
the
nactive
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native
active
inactive
community. Another issue is,
due to
high
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the high
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volume of
people
entering
country
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the country
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they might end up littering so much trash and causing inconvenience to the residents.
For example
, when
Football
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the Football
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world cup
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World Cup
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took place in UAE,
people
did not understand the importance of their
dressing
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code and ultimately ended up hurting local's
feeling's
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feelings
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. To put
in
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it in
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a
nut shell
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, In my perspective, if the
country
is capable of handling
people
who flock to watch games, they should definitely host. Even though there
are
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is
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some
downside
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downsides
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of
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to
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inviting
sport's
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sports
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team
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teams
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to their native land, the advantage of organising
atheletic
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athletic
events has more
benefit's
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benefits
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.
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