You recently went to a public event (for example an exhibition, festival, or show) that you think your friend would enjoy. Write a letter to friend. In your letter • tell your friend what the event was • explain why you think your friend would like the event invite them to come to the event with you

Dear Raju, Hope you are hale and healthy. Recently I went to a
yoga
festival near Hougang and I had a great experience.
Hence
, I wanted to invite you
for
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the next
event
which will happen in 1
month
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time.
Also
, It's been a
while
since we met and it would be a better way to meet
while
we practise some
yoga
moves. The
yoga
event
was conducted by a famous
yoga
master Shri. Sambhav, who has almost 25 years of
yoga
experience. He has thought these ancient yogic moves all around the globe and most of the reviews from the followers are highly positive.
Moreover
,
through out
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the
event
,
master
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would provide lots of interesting tips that
enhances
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our concentration and performance. I know you are into health and fitness and
hence
, I believe
this
session would
better
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suited for you. The next
event
would occur in a month's time in the same Hougang stadium avenue. Since the
registeration
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registration
is only for
certain
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time, I want you to register it before next weekend. Hope to see you soon. Best regards, Ram
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Consider breaking down long sentences to enhance readability. This will help maintain the reader's interest and ensure your ideas are clearly communicated.
coherence cohesion
Make sure all paragraphs focus on a single main idea. This will improve the clarity and coherence of your letter.
task achievement
Check for minor grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement and the use of proper tenses, to improve the overall quality of your writing.
task achievement
You provided a complete response, addressing all points in the task prompt effectively.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is conversational and friendly, making it appropriate for writing to a friend.
coherence cohesion
Good use of an opening and closing that helped structure the letter well.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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