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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, ltaly and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, andmake comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, ltaly and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, andmake comparisons where relevant.
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The given line graph illustrates how much was emitted of
an
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average
carbon
dioxide
 for
individual
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individuals
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 in
United
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the United
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 Kingdom,
Sweden
, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
Overall
, people in Italy and Portugal
was
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experienced an
increasing
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increase in
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of
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the of
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 amount
emission
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emissions
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 per individual, it is
also
 clear that despite some
fluctuated
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 of
United
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the United
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 Kingdom and
Sweden
 were considered
decrease
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to decrease
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 around that period.
Italain
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Italian
were
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emitted
carbon
dioxide
about
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of about
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 4 metric
tonnes
 to almost 8
units
 between 1967 to 2007.
Furthermore
, from 1967 the average intake
carbon
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of carbon
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dioxide
 was emitted around
a metric
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a metric tonne
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tonnes
 and
insteadly
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instead
 increased to 5.5 metric
dioxide
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dioxides
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 and remained stable until 2007. The figure for
Sweden
 started in the first year
about
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at about
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 8
units
 and hovered at
peak
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a peak
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 in 1977
about
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at about
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 10
units
,
while
 it experienced
dramatically declined
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a dramatic decline
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 in 2007 by 5 metric
tonnes
. Meanwhile,
United
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the United
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 Kingdom slowly dropped from around about 10
units
 intake
carbon
dioxide
 per person and slowly declined
about
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to about
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 8 metric
tonnes
 which
equal
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was equal
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 to the starting emission intake per person in
Sweden
 by 1967.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words carbon, dioxide, sweden, tonnes, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
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