In many country schools have severe problems with student behaivour. What do you think are the cause of this? What solutions can you suggest?

#country #schools #student #behaivour

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creating many negative effects, it can be addressed with the solutions that have been mentioned above.

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The essay's main ideas should be clearly articulated and well-supported with specific examples. Try to avoid general statements and ensure the details provided directly relate to the points being made.

coherence cohesion

Make sure that your essay follows a logical structure. Balance each body paragraph so that each one introduces and expands on a single idea. Include appropriate linking phrases to help the reader follow your argument.

coherence cohesion

Reviewing basic grammar and expanding vocabulary could improve the clarity and coherence of your essay. Each sentence should connect smoothly to the next. Grammar and punctuation errors also need attention.

coherence cohesion

The essay has both an introduction and a conclusion, which provides a complete essay structure.

task achievement

You correctly identified that student behavior is a problem worth addressing, and you attempted to suggest some reasons and solutions.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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In many country schools have severe problems with student behaivour. What do you think are the cause of this? What solutions can you suggest?

Include an introduction and conclusion

In some countries it is illegal to reject candidates for a job based on their ages. Discuss advantages and disadvantages of this and give your own opinion.

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Stress is now a major problem in many countries around the world. What are some of the reasons that cause stress, and effects #stress #countries #world #effects