The table below gives information about students enrolments at Bristol University in 1928, 1958 and 2008.
The table gives information about the registration of
students
to the
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apply
Bristol
University in different years, accordingly
1928, 1958 and 2008.
The table compares the percentage
of enrolments of students
to
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at
Bristol
University on
three different years. Change preposition
in
It is clear that
in each period the number of admitted candidates increased significantly.
In 1928 the males
captured the biggest proportion of admitted students
with the number of 58 percentage
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per cent
while
the student
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students
applied
from abroad Correct pronoun usage
who applied
was
the lowest with 5 %.
When it came to the data in 1958 there was a considerable decrease from 42% to 32% in the figures Correct subject-verb agreement
were
of
female Change preposition
for
students
. The same trend was also
observed in the acceptance of student percentage
within 30 miles Bristol
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of Bristol
students
as from 50% to 14%. On the other hand
, in
the proportion the Change preposition
apply
males
and students
from abroad increased in 1958. The figure for males
increased Change preposition
by nearly
nearly
10% from 58 to 68 and the date Change preposition
by nearly
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of
for
foreign Change preposition
of
students
gradually climbed from 5% to 6%.
When it comes to 2008, in
the Change preposition
apply
percentage
of admitted foreign students
had an enormous growth from 6% to 28%. There was also
a considerable climb in the proportion of female
from 32% to 54 %. In 2008 the Fix the agreement mistake
females
percentage
of admitted students
from 30 miles within Bristol
dramatically fall
to 1-2 % Wrong verb form
fell
while
for males
the same trend followed from 68% to 46 %.
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