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The two maps illustrate the external and internal changes in the design of a health centre that happened from 2005 until the present day

The two maps illustrate the external and internal changes in the design of a health centre that happened from 2005 until the present day
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Given in the blueprints are some drastic transitions
of
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 a healthcare centre between 2005 and the present.
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, most notable was how the entrance
as well as
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 the reception
being
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 relocated in order to
expanding
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 the central hall.
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,
while
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parking
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the parking
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 lot has been enlarged, the garden is reduced for the purpose of erecting extra
room
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 . Beginning with the southern side of the still-standing office where the garden has been made smaller, paving the way for a
new
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 added operations
room
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 adjacent to the physiotherapy
room
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. Noteworthy is the new CR
room
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 which is the fourth has removed the second once placed in that location. It is
also
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 worth mentioning that the hall has been centralised with seats surrounding its campus. Turning towards the remaining area of the centre with the reception
along with
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 the entrance have been moved just beside the office to the south,
whereas
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 the
children
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children's
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 playground
flaked
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flanked
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 by
those 2 removal
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that 2 removal
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 has been built for not only entertaining but
also
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 letting relaxing time for parents.
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 but not least, a relocation has
occured
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occurred
 with the first 3 CR being positionally changed.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words room with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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