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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart provides information about how different five cities in Australia have
coffee
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 and tea buying and drinking habits,
according to
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 a survey.
Overall
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, almost in every city, the most repeated activity of Australian people was to go to a café,
while
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 buying fresh
coffee
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 was the least desired for each. In general, there was a complete supremacy of going to a café for
coffee
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 or tea over purchasing
coffee
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 freshly in the
last
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 4 weeks. The rates of going to a
coffee
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 had the highest levels in Sydney, Melbourne, and Hobart, by just over 60%,
while
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 Melbourne was at the top, by nearly 65%. In Adelaide,
although
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 the percentage of going to a café for drinking is at the bottom level, it was higher than the fresh
coffee
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 consumption
nevertheless
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. Buying fresh
coffee
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 rates fluctuated approximately between 33% and 43%.
Moreover
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, the highest point of fresh
coffee
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 purchasements was in Sydney,
while
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 the lowest point was owned by Brisbane. During the
last
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 month, denizens in Australia mostly preferred instant
coffee
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 as the second choice, excepting just one city. In Adelaide, the instant
coffee
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 surprisingly outraced the others, by making up roughly 50%. Folks of Hobart deserved the title of the city which bought the instant
coffee
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 most,
while
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 Sydney was the least, respectively about 55% and 45%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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